Wrote a self defense/awareness article/ critique

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  http://sofuze.com/forget-karate-kid-self-defense-tips-from-a-federal-agent/

Ok UG I'm trying to get into writing a bit more. So I've fired off a few articles to different venues. This one was featured on a new website called SOFUZE (Social Fusion).

Give me some constructive criticism.

I just want to get better.

Thanks.

KJ

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TTT 


I have to learn the Dan The Wolfman Method of getting 9000 views per thread......

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Do you guys have an agency wide DT policy?

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I don't have any criticism, but I enjoyed the article. Nice concise presentation of the topic. If I had to come up with anything,it would be that some of the sentences especially in the beginning are short. Short sentences, period. Short sentence, period.

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TrappeBier - Do you guys have an agency wide DT policy?


 Yes, For my Federal Agency we do.

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shoudawhouda - I don't have any criticism, but I enjoyed the article. Nice concise presentation of the topic. If I had to come up with anything,it would be that some of the sentences especially in the beginning are short. Short sentences, period. Short sentence, period.


 Thanks! Flow is very hard in writing. I'm trying to learn to do it better.

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for later

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Kid Justice, can I email you on outlook and you send it to me? We do not have one, and I want to change that.

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TrappeBier - Kid Justice, can I email you on outlook and you send it to me? We do not have one, and I want to change that.


 Yeah do you have my outlook mail?

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No, but your name should be all I need, which I got due to your green name. I remember who you work for.

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KidJustice, you work for ICE?

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TrappeBier - No, but your name should be all I need, which I got due to your green name. I remember who you work for.


 10-4!

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groundfighter2000 - KidJustice, you work for ICE?


 Yes, not allowed to say that in my bio according to our ethics office. Even though a simple Google search of my name brings up news paper articles and news features on some of my cases.

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Oops, forgot to say, good article!

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groundfighter2000 - Oops, forgot to say, good article!


 Thank you!

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KidJustice - TTT 


I have to learn the Dan The Wolfman Method of getting 9000 views per thread......




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BaraoKix - 
KidJustice - TTT 


I have to learn the Dan The Wolfman Method of getting 9000 views per thread......




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 WOLFMAN!!!! I need to take classes!

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 See!!!! You are the Pro!

One typo is not too bad I guess. Send me an email and let me know what it was. Thanks for reading the article though!

I've also read a lot of Geoff Thompson stuff, but if you can get your hands on stuff that Col. Jeff Cooper wrote do it! Cooper was way ahead of his time and many of the guys today hate to admit that they got most of their stuff from him.