Check my article on TheGarv.com please.

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 Hey everyone.



I've recently been picked up as a writer for TheGarv.com owned by the UG's own Crazy Zimmerman and edited by Uncle Justice.



I've had 2 MMA related articles published with them already. 



I'd love some feedback from you guys.



http://thegarv.com/Life-Death-and-MMA.html



http://thegarv.com/Respect-and-TMA-s-Impact-on-MMA.html



Thanks.




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No need to tell us what the article is about or anything like that - why hope for something to succeed on its own merits when you can just beg instead? ;)

Let me try to be constructive and suggest some alternate titles for the future:

"Check out my article on (subject)"

"(Subject of article), check it out"

"(Subject of article or question/statement suggested by its themes)"

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Fake Rassler - No need to tell us what the article is about or anything like that - why hope for something to succeed on its own merits when you can just beg instead? ;)



Let me try to be constructive and suggest some alternate titles for the future:



"Check out my article on (subject)"



"(Subject of article), check it out"



"(Subject of article or question/statement suggested by its themes)"


 Fair enough.



Both are opinion pieces.  The first one has to do with MMA fans and what they do for this sport along with some of the big problems we face.



The other is about the culture and traditions left over from TMA's that we use in MMA.  It also touches on some of my personal experiences in the martial arts and MMA.



It won't be all that I'm writing, just what I've done so far.  I'll be doing more articles, especially fighter profiles soon.



Just trying to get feedback on my writing style, content, flow,.....whatever you want to comment on.  I just ask if you are going to be critical be constructive and tell me what I need to improve rather than just saying I suck.



Thanks. 



Dan